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A good story, not sure about the ending where they end up together but definitely enjoyed it. Very good descriptions, enjoyed the world-building and definitely gonna be reviewing this story as soon as I can.

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Just as gripping and entertaining on the second read!

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Good stuff! Vivid descriptions, great fight scene, and smooth pacing that never rushed nor lingered. Thanks for writing a great story, one that can certainly lead to more.

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Thanks so much for the encouraging words, Redd! I really appreciate your feedback. I actually feel like this might be my best story so far. I originally planned on making this a 2 part story, but decided to go ahead and wrap it up as a standalone while leaving it open ended enough for a sequel, which I definitely plan on writing at some point!

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Definitely works as a standalone with the chance of more story. Look forward to more, if the mood strikes!

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Thank you for sharing your piece! Very cinematic and dynamic!

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Nice. Well written, well-paced, and riveting. Good job, sir.

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Thanks very much! I do my best.

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Had to change it up with "reddish-blonde", eh?

It has the pacing of film, and that is a compliment.

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I don't know why, but "reddish-blonde" just seemed to fit with the Ancient Rome aesthetic.

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It’s because of ‘Rome.’

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