Fantastic! I could feel a chill up my spine when those tentacles emerged from the darkness. And I love how the character carries his son's ashes in a pouch on his belt--not even Batman does that, lol.
As a side note, it's always great when a metal song inspires a story :)
I worry for Velsparr's future, deals with eldritch horrors rarely end well though, hopefully, he exacts revenge before his horrid fated end while also dodging any feelings of forgiveness; I don't think the horror would appreciate that sort of thing. Bravo!
Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop. My mind went in a different direction than most. I wonder if the good captain used the eldritch power to find his wife?
I reread the first few paragraphs twice because I had missed that they were SKY islands (it was there, I just failed to read it accurately) and Ike love to see more in this world, maybe at a point where your hero is tired of the bargain he made?
Thanks so much! This one took a lot of effort (despite its short length), and I'm not entirely satisfied. I definitely appreciate your enthusiasm for it.
Yeah, the reflection portion is my least favorite part of the story, and what I struggled with the most. In the beginning, I was trying to tell a grander story than what I actually ended up with. I think an introduction to the world is necessary, but I may end up reworking it at some point so it's more streamlined and less clunky.
Fantastic! I could feel a chill up my spine when those tentacles emerged from the darkness. And I love how the character carries his son's ashes in a pouch on his belt--not even Batman does that, lol.
As a side note, it's always great when a metal song inspires a story :)
Speaking of that, I was listening to a lot of Nightwish when I wrote this one:
https://open.substack.com/pub/joshtatter/p/the-half-bloods-birthright?utm_source=share&utm_medium=android&r=25u9ow
I worry for Velsparr's future, deals with eldritch horrors rarely end well though, hopefully, he exacts revenge before his horrid fated end while also dodging any feelings of forgiveness; I don't think the horror would appreciate that sort of thing. Bravo!
Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop. My mind went in a different direction than most. I wonder if the good captain used the eldritch power to find his wife?
Mayhaps we shall one day find out.
I reread the first few paragraphs twice because I had missed that they were SKY islands (it was there, I just failed to read it accurately) and Ike love to see more in this world, maybe at a point where your hero is tired of the bargain he made?
If I pick it up again (which I'm inclined to do), that's exactly where I would start from.
Oh no! Gotta love a good Faustian bargain, though. This was a wonderful story!
Thanks so much! This one took a lot of effort (despite its short length), and I'm not entirely satisfied. I definitely appreciate your enthusiasm for it.
Oh dear. Not looking good for Velsparr!
Maybe we'll find out someday 🤷♂️
Now that's epic storytelling. I don't imagine it'll end well for Velsparr, though.
Wow, thanks man. I really struggled to write this story, and I'm not sure how I feel about it, so your thoughts are greatly appreciated.
Yeah, the reflection portion is my least favorite part of the story, and what I struggled with the most. In the beginning, I was trying to tell a grander story than what I actually ended up with. I think an introduction to the world is necessary, but I may end up reworking it at some point so it's more streamlined and less clunky.